Evermore, chapter 9
Sep. 17th, 2010 09:17 amIn which we learn through exposition that Damen is a smoldering pile of perfection.
( I dare anybody to find the point of this chapter. )
In which we learn through exposition that Damen is a smoldering pile of perfection.
( I dare anybody to find the point of this chapter. )
In which Damen invades Ever’s privacy, he annoys Ever at class for 2 pages, Haven joins a coven of vampires and I swear this is not Twilight fanfiction.
( You know, I imagine Edward and Damen going out every Saturday to exchange stalking tips. )
In which we have a diner with the literary equivalent of a life size barbie and emotional development gets shot dead by lazy writing.
( Whatever happen to developing a relationship between your characters? )
In which Riley creeps the fuck out of me!
( So is voyerism a normal hobbie for the ghost of a 14 year old middle class white girl? )
PS: A hurricane just passed here yesterday and my internet is still wonky. We are also getting another storm. I’ll post the other stuff during the weekend.
In which Miles pisses me off.
( Somebody should make a machine that lets you slap stupid characters. I would buy that right now! )
In which we have a lunch scene with Haven and Miles just being wonderful.
( I am Shaolina and I have a problem... )
In which Haven has a fit over the possibility of Damen not show, then he just shows up and substitutes characterization with uber hotness.
( I can honestly say I can't remember ever reading a chapter where 90% of the lines revolved around the hotness of one character. )
In which Ever gives of exposition of her current living arrangements and relationship with her sister without actually showing us.
( This is the musical edition )
( All aboard the cashcow! )