Evermore, chapter 9
Sep. 17th, 2010 09:17 amIn which we learn through exposition that Damen is a smoldering pile of perfection.
( I dare anybody to find the point of this chapter. )
In which we learn through exposition that Damen is a smoldering pile of perfection.
( I dare anybody to find the point of this chapter. )
In which Damen invades Ever’s privacy, he annoys Ever at class for 2 pages, Haven joins a coven of vampires and I swear this is not Twilight fanfiction.
( You know, I imagine Edward and Damen going out every Saturday to exchange stalking tips. )
In which we have a diner with the literary equivalent of a life size barbie and emotional development gets shot dead by lazy writing.
( Whatever happen to developing a relationship between your characters? )
In which we meet other humans and the best scene ever happens.
( I finally get a character I can root for. I wonder how long will that last. )
In which Riley creeps the fuck out of me!
( So is voyerism a normal hobbie for the ghost of a 14 year old middle class white girl? )
PS: A hurricane just passed here yesterday and my internet is still wonky. We are also getting another storm. I’ll post the other stuff during the weekend.
In which Miles pisses me off.
( Somebody should make a machine that lets you slap stupid characters. I would buy that right now! )
In which two idiots get lost in the desert and almost die.
( What do you mean repetition doesn't compensate for showing in a story? )
In which we have a lunch scene with Haven and Miles just being wonderful.
( I am Shaolina and I have a problem... )
In which Haven has a fit over the possibility of Damen not show, then he just shows up and substitutes characterization with uber hotness.
( I can honestly say I can't remember ever reading a chapter where 90% of the lines revolved around the hotness of one character. )
In which Ever gives of exposition of her current living arrangements and relationship with her sister without actually showing us.
( This is the musical edition )
In which Wanderer travels the desert and finds a deserted house.
( Guess this week's special theme )
( All aboard the cashcow! )
Sorry guys, but I'm super busy again. I couldn't do the whole thing in one sitting. But hey, something is something.
In this chapter Wanderer and Melanie go shopping and head out to the desert. Yeah, that's pretty much it.
In this chapter Wanderer decides to stop at Picacho Peak to rest who is on her way to Tucson. This causes Melanie to flashback and reveal that that’s where the guys are heading because that’s where Melanie’s cousin Sharon lives. Wanderer gets the info and is thinking what to do about that. The chapter ends with them in front of the place. The end. There, the plot of this chapter.
I want to take the rest of the space to Shaolina’s “It just bugs me” post about the host. But before even that, there’s something I need to do before I can move on with this series.
( Would anybody else here rather read a werewolf/human/vamp team humting giant bug aliens? )
Welcome to another sporking of “This is not Twilight, I swear.” Shaolina is still in a stupid comma and Justin bailed so I’m all alone. In the last chapter we learned how souls have instinctive driving powers since Wanderer is driving to Tucson without ever taking a class, doing it slowly on a highway and is mind probing Melanie as she does so taking her into her memories. How she hasn’t crashed yet I don’t know. Now let’s see what this memory is all about.
( Have you ever experienced deja vu while reading a book? )
Eliza: Whatever.
Justin: Now, I bet whoever is reading this is wondering “Where is Shaolina?” She’s a bit indisposed at the moment. She was given more work to deal with and a new deadline. She thought she would be done by Monday but turns out she won’t be done until Wednesday. That’s when her special project ends.
Eliza: Plus the wussy went to see that… air magician movie to take a break and is overacting like a bad 70s ripoff movie actor. Something about living in a world where eclipses are ok and those blue cat people suck monkey balls. Then some lake shows up and she wants to dump toxic waste on him. Look guys, I don’t know. Let’s just get this over with, I was promised a 5-meat sub and some chips.
( Convo inside. )